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Where God Was Born


The hawk-eyed sun blinked shut
come sunset yesterday
and my world went dark like . . .

               death dressed in brass jackets and
               dark eyes behind baskets and
               lead clouds that smell like wet matches


. . . I stood alone.

I stood alone on a graveled knoll
come nightfall yesterday
and on the air, I tasted a taste like . . .

               blood baked in sand and
               ovens hot underhand and
               an iron pot left to rust on a riverbed


. . . I was burning.

I was burning like a cold war
come midnight yesterday
and my soul was razed like . . .

               phosphor falling like flames and
               bushes charred by His rain and
               the fabled walls of Jericho


. . . I was broken.

I was broken down to shards
come daybreak yesterday
and my mind was jig-sawed like . . .

               hectares of salt flats and
               green lines drawn up on maps and
               shrapnel from a child's ticking vest


. . . I was crying.

I was crying for ruin
come sunrise yesterday
and my tears were bitter like . . .

               winds off the Dead Sea and
               the poems of a refugee and
               a war that lasts all of six days


. . . I was dying.

I was dying in the Negev
come midday yesterday
and my life slipped by like . . .

               prayers to the moon and
               girls bled too soon and
               water poured out on a tank


. . . it was over.

It was over like an hourglass
come twilight yesterday
and I let my flag fall
because rice is to weddings as dust is to death
and there will always be stars above all . . .

Yes, the hawk-eyed sun blinked shut
come sunset yesterday
and my world went dark like
                                     I stood alone
                                     like
                                     I was burning
                                     like
                                     I was broken
                                     like
                                     I was crying
                                     like
                                     I was dying
                                     like
                                     it was over,
                                     over until tomorrow.

Like it was over until tomorrow . . .

Well, I'll just wait here until then
when it all will start again.

I'll wait here among the greens and limes,
these soldiers with their howitzer spines.

I'll wait here . . .  
and dream of milk up above
of suns that are white as the brightest white dove.

I'll wait here . . .
and listen for Gabriel's horn
in this barbed-wire land where Jehovah was born.

I'll wait here . . .
until tomorrow.
:iconpegasusunbound:

Author's Comments

Okay . . . time for my religious/political disclaimer . . .

To all those parties who might find that this represents them, please know that I have the greatest respect for your governments, your culture, and your beliefs. I don't condone war, and I don't condone terrorism. I want peace, just like I think 99.9% of the 6 billion people on this planet want peace. I wrote this poem because I felt a need to express my personal views about a certain part of the world, not that the subject is all that ambiguous anyway. Still, I don't mean this as an attack of any kind; I write this out of sadness, not hate. I want to badly for something I'm not sure can actually be achieved, so I wanted to write something that put a bit of that helpless sorrow into words. Using the voice of a person far stronger than myself, I tried to convey a weariness, and perhaps an uneasiness, one that only a veteran can truly speak to. I know I'm walking on some thin ice, here, especially being an American Christian, but again, I write this with the utmost respect and the greatest desire for a resolution to Middle Eastern conflict everywhere.

If I have insulted you, please let me know what part of this work is offensive. I won't guarantee an edit, but I will guarantee very careful consideration and a very open mind.

If there is something wrong with the actual craft of the poem, feel free to critique.

If you are moved by the poem, feel free to fav and run. As a busy person myself, I never would want to be pressured into commenting, though it is always appreciated.

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:icondreams-of-skies:
No running. This is a fav and a :hug: - it's amazing. Absolutely amazing.

You are...*shakes head* I have no idea how you do it but I'm glad there is talent such as yours.

--
"What I say is: When you're dealing with the Devil, Praise the Lord....and pass the ammunition." - Dan Dark, 'The Singing Detective'

"I'll say it again: Demons I get. People are crazy." - Dean Winchester, 'Supernatural'
:iconpegasusunbound:
Thanks so much. You know I'm always really happy to get comments from you guys! :hug: I know I haven't been around a lot, but I was really sick over Gaza, and I should have vented with a journal but I didn't have the time. Now I have something posted and it makes me feel better.

Hope you're doing well!

--
"This has to be the stupidest thing any human being has ever done!"

"Then why are you following me?"

"I don't frickin' know!"

~Tony and Ziva, NCIS
:icondreams-of-skies:
Believe me - that piece of work says everything beautifully. It really does. And it echoes down the years too. It's got the tone and emotion and expression that I want to give some of my most battle-weary moments for characters.

I'm good. Got a newer obsession :giggle: but things aren't too bad. Just hope you're doing good - I know you've been real busy.

--
"What I say is: When you're dealing with the Devil, Praise the Lord....and pass the ammunition." - Dan Dark, 'The Singing Detective'

"I'll say it again: Demons I get. People are crazy." - Dean Winchester, 'Supernatural'
:iconpegasusunbound:
Thanks again. I actually have some problems with it still, but I deemed it worthy to post. I've been working on it for a week, so . . .

And what's you're new obsession? ;p

--
"This has to be the stupidest thing any human being has ever done!"

"Then why are you following me?"

"I don't frickin' know!"

~Tony and Ziva, NCIS
:icondreams-of-skies:
It feels. It honestly just feels.

Oh...I am about 3 years behind everyone else but I've gotten in with Supernatural...and yes, I'm a Dean-girl. He's a butt-kicking, good-looking, gun-toting smart-ass? What's not to love?! :giggle:

--
"What I say is: When you're dealing with the Devil, Praise the Lord....and pass the ammunition." - Dan Dark, 'The Singing Detective'

"I'll say it again: Demons I get. People are crazy." - Dean Winchester, 'Supernatural'
:iconpegasusunbound:
Never seen it. I'm hooked on NCIS, though! :giggle:

--
"This has to be the stupidest thing any human being has ever done!"

"Then why are you following me?"

"I don't frickin' know!"

~Tony and Ziva, NCIS
:icondreams-of-skies:
You and your love affair with Tony and Ziva...:D

It's a good show. Very....plenty of whumping, angst, comedy, folklore and brotherly love. I LOVE it! :giggle:

--
"What I say is: When you're dealing with the Devil, Praise the Lord....and pass the ammunition." - Dan Dark, 'The Singing Detective'

"I'll say it again: Demons I get. People are crazy." - Dean Winchester, 'Supernatural'
:iconpegasusunbound:
What can I say? I like unresolved sexual tension, and Abby and McGee don't cut it for me. :giggle:

--
"This has to be the stupidest thing any human being has ever done!"

"Then why are you following me?"

"I don't frickin' know!"

~Tony and Ziva, NCIS
:iconhonor-to-serve:
NCIS FTW!!!!!

*squee and run*

:giggle:

--
"Hey Dan! Mom-"
"Hello?"
"Dan? I said Mom-"
"What?"
"Dan?"
"You're breaking up."
*Shouting* "Dan! Can you hear me now?"
"Hello?"
"Daniel! Mom said to-"
"This is my voicemail. Leave a message." *beep*
"...I hate you." *click*

Me vs my bro's voicemail.

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